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Post The shutting of the door.

The door is ajar.

The door stands open and inside is, I know not what.

It is in there and I know it means me a mischief.

Here I stay, immobile with uncertainty.

Still I stand and it knows that I am.

The thing, it smells, it breathes me in and tastes my stench.

It purrs and I am lulled by the sound.

I seem closer now, but how?

By no will of mine has this body been impelled.

Though I am glad.

This flesh sings to be tasted by the unknowable beast.

In it's dying ecstasy to glimpse the hinted at truths beyond the veil.

And it was that I took the stride which brought me closer to extinction.

Trembling euphoria shook my very core and I reached for the threshhold.

Between a moment and infinity I became lost.

And with it, the shutting of the door.


Thu Jun 24, 2010 7:13 am
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Post Re: The shutting of the door.
Beautiful. At least I think so. Glad you included a picture of a hallway too. =)

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Post Re: The shutting of the door.
Agree with Midnight. Awesome. :thumbsup

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Post Re: The shutting of the door.
Abit opaque, so I had to read it multiple times. I like it though.
Here I stay, immobile with uncertainty. Really liked this line, reminds me of...me. :closedeyes
As for the picture, it seems like a generic office hallway, or a hallway to some appartment.
Hmm.

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Post Re: The shutting of the door.
Thanks for the kind words. I'm not sure if I know what you mean by opaque BLT.
It didn't fit naturally with you?I guess something wasn't jiving with you if you had
to read it several times. I likely didn't help by not considering using metre. I didn't
really plan to write it though, so perhaps that is why.


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